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your attenuate bones
clik clak
clak
against each other
against my ankles
pooled
in the foot of this sleeping bag



they summon up
eighty-eight goose-bumps taught to sing
evanescence in the summer(.)
we loved.


now: see-
through skin
for your viewing pleasure
reasoning with irresponsible tendons
writhing cos we were we are one
typewriter with two dry
mouths,
fifty-six detac
hed teeth






"never more than one hundred hand breadths apart and never more"
"feels like the weight of the world
like all my screaming has gone unheard
and oh, i know you don't believe in me
safe in the dark, how can you see?"
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You are amazing and awesome and you send shivers down my spine. Reading what you write is like - I don't even know. Like those people who create miniature metropolis's out of matchsticks, but if they did it with wishbones and held it together with grass seeds.

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I don't know what else to say? The idea is amazing, the way you wrote it is phenomenal, your actual technique makes my knees tremble and you're just...

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PassionsInsanity Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is just so damned amazing. :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
:hug:
It means a lot to me that you think so.
:heart:
Thankyou thankyou.
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PassionsInsanity Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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onerasers Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
this is so exquisite and lovely.
another precious piece of writing i read from/by/trough you.
i know i am at risk of missing the point, but i find it so incredibly endearing the way you use numbers, which makes it all seem so precise and measured, and yet utterly... raw and bursting, only... not quite. i don't know. might be making some bad word choices here, but it's tolerable i guess.
so... this is all pure amazingness, i must confess.
you had me counting randomnesses out loud, and i love you for it.
now - to cut off the babbling! (as i plead guilty for lacking coherence).

well, to sum it up easily, your seventy-seven words just made my week.

thankyousosomuch. ♥
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
Whoa!
What a compliment!!
I know just what you mean with what you're saying.. it makes perfect sense cos that's what I meant for this to be like. ^_^ This is about a real person.. one who just isn't entirely tangible at the moment. Those feelings of longing for other times came to the surface.. so in that sense this is raw, but in a way that is calculated.. as these sort of thoughts aren't new to me. I'm used to missing her.

Thank you so so so much. Honestly.. the fact that you could feel what this meant to me means so much! :huggle:
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onerasers Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
You are so very welcome! :huggle:
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Knifapotamas Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love your writing so much, dear. <3 Really really. Reading your work just brings a smile to my face every time. I just can't help but grin. :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
And I can't help but grin when I read your comments. :D
You're so sweet, thank you so much.
You should link me to some of your latest greatest works, eh? Sorry I haven't been on dA much.
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Knifapotamas Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
xD I've been focusing more on my drawing than writing lately, but this is my most recent. Mind you, it's prose, so it may not be up to par- I'm aware that I don't do non-poemy things that well. xD

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adi0 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2011  Student Photographer
Great work like usual. :)
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