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Eleven fifty-six
A madman tromps into our house
and shakes like a dog to free the snow from his hair.
With feigned stealth he mounts the stairs two and three at a time.
Down the hall at the open door he is greeted
with the sound of his maiden's relax-ed breaths.



Ah,
this daydream,
not of -day-
but of -dreams-
the sort that would conquer and ravish her harried mind.
White knuckled
and of similar countenance,
she flutes her practiced solo.

Innnn
Outttt
Innnn
Outttt


One
baritone sigh,
two overcast eyes,
and it's to the pillow with him.
He squirms, fidgets and jostles til the whole house complains aloud.
Then, in the sudden stillness,
he implodes
at learning what he already knew.



innnnouttttinnnnoutttt
She daren't shift or
snatch a scratch.
With a forearm over her eyes she imagines she's captive.
Pirates, probably.
Ohyes, indeed.
Pirates!
If she so much as moves or even sighs--


"Jenna." Her breath catches in the back of her throat like a fishing hook.
She swallows it.

"JENNA!"


...............................


Innnnnnnnnnnnnn
Outttttttttttttttttttt


He curls around her
like the first quarter moon

to its dark side
and worms through her hair til his nose finds scalp.


Her shallow exhale pulls her



farther
I love the name "Jenna" the way they say it in Balto.
That's not how it is spoken in this piece.
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Silent-Lulliby Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
fantastic. wow. both bold and explosive.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
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PeanutButterLegs Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011
Holy crap. With with words like "ravish" and "Pirates" it seemed incredibly erotic. And very well done at that. XP
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londonrey Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Thank you so much!! This kind of came out of nowhere and wouldn't stop pestering me until I wrote it.
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PeanutButterLegs Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Heh. Definitely had that happen.
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dead-neon-light Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
haha you'll be like 'whaaaat' but i wanted to tell you that i really like the use of boldness in this piece instead of say italics or whatever
in my head i was reading those bits loudly and forcefully and they changed the effect of the poem a lot
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
That's great to hear! That's just what my plan was for this piece. ^_^ I'm not like "whaaaat" cos I totally understand. :D
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darkfeatheredwings Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
1. I loveeeeeeeeeeeeee Balto.

2. I love the part about pirates.

3. I love this piece. :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
1. I know, right?!

2. (:

3. Really? Thank you so much. I loveyouuuu.
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captainmouse Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011
Jen-ha! :heart: That was one of my favourite movies as a child. I used to make nests out of fresh-folded laundry filled with graham cracker rations, and watch it again and again.

This is really lovely, London. It dances on the edge where nostalgia meets the hereandnow. I adore the sense of breathing that you've woven throughout, I can almost hear that as a background noise as I read the piece.

I'm afraid my computer keeps freezing, so I bid you adieu until I restart it and do a virus check :) Granted all goes well with that, and I don't end up with a chunk of useless circuit-boards and wires, I plan on returning and leaving another review of something a bit later on in the evening.

-Frankie

post script. You dubbed a term "spiderwebby" in a reply to one of my comments. Perhaps a lady of your linguistic prowess would prefer spider-webesque. It looks silly on paper, but I adore how it sounds when spoken aloud.
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