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Eleven fifty-six
A madman tromps into our house
and shakes like a dog to free the snow from his hair.
With feigned stealth he mounts the stairs two and three at a time.
Down the hall at the open door he is greeted
with the sound of his maiden's relax-ed breaths.



Ah,
this daydream,
not of -day-
but of -dreams-
the sort that would conquer and ravish her harried mind.
White knuckled
and of similar countenance,
she flutes her practiced solo.

Innnn
Outttt
Innnn
Outttt


One
baritone sigh,
two overcast eyes,
and it's to the pillow with him.
He squirms, fidgets and jostles til the whole house complains aloud.
Then, in the sudden stillness,
he implodes
at learning what he already knew.



innnnouttttinnnnoutttt
She daren't shift or
snatch a scratch.
With a forearm over her eyes she imagines she's captive.
Pirates, probably.
Ohyes, indeed.
Pirates!
If she so much as moves or even sighs--


"Jenna." Her breath catches in the back of her throat like a fishing hook.
She swallows it.

"JENNA!"


...............................


Innnnnnnnnnnnnn
Outttttttttttttttttttt


He curls around her
like the first quarter moon

to its dark side
and worms through her hair til his nose finds scalp.


Her shallow exhale pulls her



farther
I love the name "Jenna" the way they say it in Balto.
That's not how it is spoken in this piece.
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acciopen Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
fantastic. wow. both bold and explosive.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
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PeanutButterLegs Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011
Holy crap. With with words like "ravish" and "Pirates" it seemed incredibly erotic. And very well done at that. XP
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londonrey Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Thank you so much!! This kind of came out of nowhere and wouldn't stop pestering me until I wrote it.
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PeanutButterLegs Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Heh. Definitely had that happen.
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dead-neon-light Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
haha you'll be like 'whaaaat' but i wanted to tell you that i really like the use of boldness in this piece instead of say italics or whatever
in my head i was reading those bits loudly and forcefully and they changed the effect of the poem a lot
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
That's great to hear! That's just what my plan was for this piece. ^_^ I'm not like "whaaaat" cos I totally understand. :D
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lealsfeels Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
1. I loveeeeeeeeeeeeee Balto.

2. I love the part about pirates.

3. I love this piece. :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
1. I know, right?!

2. (:

3. Really? Thank you so much. I loveyouuuu.
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captainmouse Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2011
Jen-ha! :heart: That was one of my favourite movies as a child. I used to make nests out of fresh-folded laundry filled with graham cracker rations, and watch it again and again.

This is really lovely, London. It dances on the edge where nostalgia meets the hereandnow. I adore the sense of breathing that you've woven throughout, I can almost hear that as a background noise as I read the piece.

I'm afraid my computer keeps freezing, so I bid you adieu until I restart it and do a virus check :) Granted all goes well with that, and I don't end up with a chunk of useless circuit-boards and wires, I plan on returning and leaving another review of something a bit later on in the evening.

-Frankie

post script. You dubbed a term "spiderwebby" in a reply to one of my comments. Perhaps a lady of your linguistic prowess would prefer spider-webesque. It looks silly on paper, but I adore how it sounds when spoken aloud.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
It is such a lovely endearing movie. ^^j

I don't even know where this piece came from. I can't find the trigger in this brain of mine anymore. Maybe that's good.

I send get-well wishes to your computer! (:


post script. That strikes me as a splendid idea, darling. spider-webesque. yummmm.
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The intensity of pictures and emotions I got while reading this poem is astounding :faint: I am amazed!
Even if you haven't decided to put certain parts in bold the poem would still be perfectly understandable, but I think bold nicely compliments your words.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
Wow, thanks for the wonderful compliment!! :D
I really appreciate it! :heart:
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :)
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Wolf-Flash Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2011
"Her breath catches in the back of her throat like a fishing hook.
She swallows it."

</3................ You can really hear the main character's fear, but also her innocent thoughts trying to escape it...
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2011
Yeah! That's just the point. :D Thanks so much!!!!
I am so incredibly happy that you read all this stuff! I can't thank you enough baby!
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regatta-red Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2011
This is so cute. I love how it has a narrative to it. And your descriptions are so imaginative... you've managed to capture those things I've always known and pinned them down and described them in a new way. Wonderful! :D
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011
D'awww!
You're so sweet to me. ^_^
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! The amount of detail and emotion your fit into your poems is quite astounding. Every line has such fantastic impact. :love:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011
:love:
Thank you so much hon!!
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cality Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! <3
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Yelshua Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2011
I don't see how you can say your writing isn't very good lately. I think it's marvelous!!
Also, I'm sorry I haven't sent much to you via the collab. I don't have any reliable computers to use.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011
acdekkk!
This is nonsense! :XD:
Thanks though. (:
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Yelshua Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2011
Tis not nonsense.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2011
If you say so.
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Yelshua Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2011
And I do. So there. :p
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Stopsel Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2011
Ha ha...

I really like how intense this is.

But I'm not going to lie... It was really weird to see my name crop up in the middle of it. >.<

Nevertheless, it's magnificent as usual!
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011
You have a lovely name dear!
^^j
Thanks !
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Stopsel Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
Oh, London. =J
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
Oh, me..
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Stopsel Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2011
:hug:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011  Professional Writer
beautifulbeautifulbeautiful :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011
Yessss you are. :heart:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2011  Professional Writer
:hug:
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ATrueNorseman Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hehehehe yesss!
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011
^_^
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silklilies Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i adore this <3
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011
awe are you for real?
:love:
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silklilies Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
of course and absolutely yes yes<3
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not fond of the bold, but it certainly does paint a scene. Keep it up.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011
(:
Thanks a lot!
I just wanted to make those sections more manly.
:XD:
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pwilliamstein Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011
Wow, yeah, this one...also very vivid...relatable to the reader...
Would you mind if I add this to a group gallery that I'm apart of? They could use more writing submissions.
:D:beer:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011
I would love that! (:
I don't generally submit to lots of groups, because I just .. well I used to but I don't take the time to do that anymore is all. I am honored that you would want this piece for your group. ^_^
Thanks!
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pwilliamstein Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011
No, thank you. :D
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Iniquitire Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011
an interesting piece! i like it
my favorite stanza is the second
personally, i would be more surprised if you said "not of dreams but of day"
but it might not have fit properly. so...yes :heart: i love it (:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011
Ohhh, she dreams of dreaming, as in, she wants to sleep but she can't, or she isn't. That's the point of those words. Thank you darlin. ^_^
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Iniquitire Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2011
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm I LOVE BALTO SO MUCH and i think that i will watch it again soon...sometimessssss it makes me cry...i can quote every single line ughhhhhhh <3

anyway...this piece, i looooooove that ending...this is whoa <3
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londonrey Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011
I love that movie toooooo!! It's amazing, right??
I haven't seen it for a while cos we only have it on VHS and we don't have a player anymore. D: Anyway, that's the only reason I like that name. :D Heh.
THANKYOUUU!!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Why don't you paint a scene, dear? Haha...you're so terribly detailed in the most magnificent of ways. (:

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Different, as usual..
You impress me so. (:
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