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I straddle the peak of this roof.
Nightbright snow burns my unshoed feet
& they burn it back.
I shiver at the effort of this white-on-white battle to-the-death.
I quiver until the shingles scrape at my toes.

Stiffly these legs obey my orders & climb the bloody chimney.

The wind silences my pleas for mercy, yet I
unfold myself into a bird & then into a diver.
Cupping my hands I feverishly scratch at
peeling-paint clouds; these crumble and flake to the ground.

One heavensent gust collects under the swan feathers tied in my hair
& I ascend owl-eyed to the top of this night.

Crashing in through the scab I picked open, I land with a woosh.
I peel ice from my eyes and grab at stars with greedy hands
almost forgetting why I came.
They sting like blue-hot coals.
I hurl them back.

Frowning indignantly at singed palms,
I blink several times.
My eyes water & the tears freeze in their ducts.
My breath becomes irregular and shallow.

I find a divan and drape myself acrost it on my back.
Making circles with my hands,
I form a telescope of skin & bone.
With a sweep of longing acrost the fiery sky,
I straighten my fingers and widen my eyes.

Flashes of blinking red reflect against luminous metal.
This manmade wonder taunts me from just out of reach.
Straining and wishing do nothing.


I shove phrases out my mouth like baby birds from the nest.
I shoot words-like-arrows farther than I can see.

I shove phrases out my mouth like baby birds from the nest.
I shoot words-like-arrows farther than I can see.
Far enough for you to hear.
Far enough for you.
unofficial sequel to "Death by Obscurity" [link]

live to tell the tale-passion pit
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InfinityOnTheRun Featured By Owner May 30, 2011
They sting like blue-hot coals.
I hurl them back.


and

I form a telescope of skin & bone.

Gorgeous. :wow:
The imagery in this is lovely.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2011
Imagery writes itself in my head.
Thank you so much for all the comments, I sincerely appreciate it. (:
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Wolf-Flash Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Oh, the torturingly beautiful imagery!!!!
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londonrey Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2011
Thank you so much!!
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storyofmylife054 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011
lovvveeee passion pit!!
and this is amazing! I don't know how you do it!
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londonrey Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2011
I don't know how I do it either. (:
These things just play in my head like movies.
Thanks you so much love.
Passion Pit is my favorite!!
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storyofmylife054 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011
Mmm that makes sense.
You're welcome!
CHYEAH THEY ARE AWESOME!
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Yelshua Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
The first couple of stanzas make me think of Pokemon Blakc and White. The rest of it is amzazing...:)
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2011
Hahaha! Why Pokemon??
And thank you! :heart:
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Yelshua Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011
Pokemon because the imagery makes me think I am in a battle with the new legendary from Black.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011
Neato!
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011   Writer
oh honey this is wondrous
i don't have any other way to describe it except with a slew of unnecessary beauty-adjectives.
your poems make me hold my breath and let it out again when i'm finished, and i always want to read them againagainagain.
your imagery words collapse in my eyes and mold seamless pictures.
"i form a telescope of skin & bone.
with a sweep of longing acrost the fiery sky,
i straighten my fingers and widen my eyes."
nothing short of magnificent :heart:
i hope you're doing well :hug:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
i hope i'm doing well too. ;)
today has been nice.
:heart:
you make me smile, always.
how are you?
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011   Writer
that's wonderful:heart:
aww, and the same goes for you.
i am okay. breathing. still. it feels nice.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2011
breathing is nice
reassuring
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011   Writer
concrete, like it won't change, but fleeting, like you could forget to
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2011
of course.
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AlterEgo1629 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
"
One heavensent gust collects under the swan feathers tied in my hair
& I ascend owl-eyed to the top of this night."
I love this part.

Amazing piece, with lovely imagery that sparks the imagination. :clap:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
:blowkiss:
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Stopsel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
I love this whole thing.

"Flashes of blinking red reflect against luminous metal..."
There is a four-way stop by my house and the four red lights blink constantly. In the winter, it looks all eerie and mysterious, especially with the gorgeous old trees that grow on the corners, and stretch their branches over the intersection. It gives me a feeling of romantic longing and mystery.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
Thankyou so much for that. That's beautiful. ^_^
I love little things like that, they always make me want to write. :heart: Enchanting. That's the word. I was describing a satellite, by the way. (:
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Stopsel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
That's so cool! I kept trying to think of what that line could mean. It's fun to know. =J
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
:D I'm glad it was neat enough to make you wonder! Thanks a billion honey!
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Stopsel Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
Of course! ^_^
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NobodyThePerfect Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011   General Artist
I'm nowhere near educated enough to guess what it's about, but it's fascinating and captivating and amazing nevertheless.
Also, Passion Pit = ♥
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
OHMYGOSH, I know, right?!?!
I adore Passion Pit. :D:D:D
I thought I knew what this was about while I was writing it.. but it's so different than I thought when I read it back to myself.. <3
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NobodyThePerfect Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011   General Artist
:D Mhmmm! I want their CD/plural!
I know that feeling.
Always good to see you writing :)
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
They have a stripped down version of Sleepyhead on the special edition of their cd, it's EPIC.
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NobodyThePerfect Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011   General Artist
EEEE! I wanna hear that. All Of it. Time to buy, whenever I find it. I always end up ordering stuff and then finding it...
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
I got the special edition one at Walmart, if that helps you. ^_^ If you wanted I could try and email that one to you? That song I mean. It's wondrous!
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NobodyThePerfect Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011   General Artist
I wish we had Walmart lol!
If you want / have the time I would love to hear it haha :D
I'll note you my e-mail address?
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
Yeahyeah! DO IT. :D
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
I wonder what this would look like as prose. I feel like that might be more effective with your ampersands and short sentences.
I really love this line: "Cupping my hands I feverishly scratch at
peeling-paint clouds; these crumble and flake to the ground."
So beautiful :heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
I honestly hadn't even thought of that.
I wouldn't doubt that this would work as prose, though, I'm not sure that I feel up to switching it now. If I were going to work on this again I would look into that for sure. (: Thanks so much. ^_^
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
Of course :heart:
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hmmm this seems very different from your usual stuff. i cant quite put my finger on it, as to why it feels different, but it does. its lovely, though, as always, strong and powerful, rushing to meet me. i love the ending. its like an echo. beautifulll.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
I agree. This felt different for me. Almost like I was taking a step back and looking in on myself from a distance. But still the feelings were on the surface.. if that makes sense to you. :heart: Thankyou love!
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Evil-Jeebit Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
wow london
with everything you write i am just purely amazed by how brilliant you are!
every piece of yours that i have read just captivates me.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
thankyou thankyou so much.
that means a lot. ^^
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Figures it'd be me to take on the argument that an aching heart may be a common place, but it's hardly common-place when described by someone with such a heart as your's.
I think it takes on a deeper...hurt feeling, when I poet can use a somewhat regular term and sell it so that it feels new and extra knot-filled.
Moving away from that argument, I want to say that I lovelovelove this one...more so than a lot of your more recent ones. It's different, but it has my dear little London all inside it.
It leads one to believe in the beginning that you're ready to give in, to leave it all behind...jumping.
But I see you mean to jump in a different manner.
Seems as though you're trying to get away from this cold...that burns you, antagonizes you. So you go to the opposing end, and fight at it from the opposite side.

Going back to the line:
Straining and wishing do nothing to nourish my aching heart.
Seems like you've more than realized you're in control here, despite the odds.

And then that close..
The repetition of it.. To me, feels like a quiet desperation to be heard.

--London :heart:
I'm quite sorry for rambling on and on and on.
You know your words dig into me though.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
Rachel, please please please never apologize for rambling. I adore it. ^^ I did change that line.. I just left off the "aching heart" bit. I'm glad you made an argument for me though. (: That line was bothering me anyway. ;) It's interesting that you like this one better.. hmmmmmmm. I felt like I was looking in on myself doing all these things.. like I just watched and wrote what I saw. It wasn't a conscious effort to come up with anything. <33 IT IS A DESPERATION TO BE HEARD.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Ok! I'm sorry! I mean...umm, I'm not. :D
Never ever will I be sorry again, for anything!
Or.. Whatever. I like this. I ramble. BAM. ;)
Well, I made an argument 'cause I like your words as they come out.
That's how it came out...so it fit for me. (:
Hmm...really? That's interesting. And it certainly explains the different viewpoint.
It felt SO different than a lot of your things.

:heart: I THOUGHT IT WAS. :heart:
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DancesWithLightening Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Crashing in through the scab I picked open, I land with a woosh.
I peel ice from my eyes and grab at stars with greedy hands
almost forgetting why I came.
They sting like blue-hot coals.
I hurl them back.


Fantastic! By far one of the best poems I've read in a long time, and that particular stanza is so wonderfully written. Great job! :D
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
That's such high praise, thanks very much!!! :heart:
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DancesWithLightening Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D
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bright-eyes-only Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
Ooh I hope this isn't describing what it seems to be describing...
Beautifully written as always- although to an extent I agree with ~berlinBuenosAyres in that 'aching heart' feels a little too common-place (for you). I love the repition of the final stanza though, so I guess its just opinion based.

The last stanza in particular is lovely, and the last line really packs a punch.
Xx:heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
Reading this back I see what you might have thought I was describing. That's not it love. I just want him to know things he has no way of knowing because I can't tell him and that hurts me. That's all. I took out the "aching heart" bit cos I felt like it was awful too. (:

:heart:
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bright-eyes-only Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
Ah, thank goodness. Thats okay then. I understand.
Not awful, just not as brilliantly incredible as the rest of your writing :)

:heart:
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londonrey Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
Yesyesyes.
You always flatter me.
I love you.
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berlinBuenosAyres Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
is the penultimate paragraph repeated on purpose? if yes, i don't quite like that repetition. the poem doesn't really needs it either.

i really like the quasi-story it tells, the descriptions that make the protagonist made me think em as somewhat a commedia dell'arte character. The last stanza is magnificent, very well done.

though (as always, right?) there's two things...
in "...to nourish my aching heart." the aching heart, that fucking commonplace... i don't know, maybe even just dropping the "aching" part would fix it, but it's seriously too cliché.
the second thing is not something that is, but something that it is not. there, after the stanza that finish with "...irregular and shallow." i just can sense there should be something more, like i'm getting the abridged version. there's something about that last verse that doesn't completely harmonize with the next one (which is great, btw). i feel, the character on that paragraph is in gloom but right in the next one we get to see his playful face again, and even if sometimes that's good, in this case it creates that invisible gap i tell you about. or maybe not, i don't know, my english is going cave-man on me right now, sorry.

salut Londresking!
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